专业指导英语写作服务
专业批改、翻译英语作文
留言给我们 站内搜索
作文地带QQ群:81784028
作文地带-有翻译的英语作文网 数十人的翻译团队,提供有原创翻译的英语作文,作文地带是您英语学习的好帮手!英语作文网

英语作文点评:I want to try

时间:2010-08-20来源:英语作文点评栏目:网友投稿英语作文作者:英语学习 英语作文收藏:收藏本文
作文地带点评:I want to try My dream is to be a teacher.I will try my best to study ,although my grades isn t good. I am very interested in English,but I am nervous when the teacher asks me to answer the qustions.My composition always make mistakes on the gramme
作文地带点评:I want to try

  My dream is to be a teacher.I will try my best to study ,although my grades isn´ t good.
  I am very interested in English,but I am nervous when the teacher asks me to answer the qustions.My composition always make mistakes on the grammer .I maked a big progess on my PE exam yesterday.So I believe that "Nothing in the world is impossible if you set your mind to do it."Now,I don´t be afraid of lost face.I hope can by this way to write the better compotions."Pratise makes perfect."I should recite some good senters.Whatever I face,I never give up.The rainbow always appear after the rainy.

批 改 老 师:杨老师
评      分:84分
级      别:优良
评      语:
本文写出了作者的心声,表现出作者积极的心态,是片很不错的习作。但作者对英语的应用还不够熟练,文中出现了用词错误和不当的问题,语法上个别地方也有问题,这些都需要作者多下功夫,多加联系运用以得到提高。

My dream is to be a teacher.I will try my best to study ,although my grades aren't(主语“grades”为复数) good.

I am very interested in English,but I am nervous when the teacher asks me to answer the qustions.I always make mistakes in grammer in my compositions.("make mistakes“的主语只能是人,“在什么方面有问题”应用介词“in”).I made great("make“的过去是有误,"progress“是不可数名词) progess in (在考试中应用此介词)my PE exam yesterday.So I believe that "Nothing in the world is impossible if you make(“make one's mind to do sth,“固定搭配) your mind to do it."Now,I am not (此处不需助动词)afraid of losting(“of”是介词,后应跟动名词) face.I hope I (缺少主语)can write better compositions in this way(原句语序不正确,并且介词使用有误,比较级前通常不需定冠词)."Pratise makes perfect."I should recite some good sentences(拼写有误).Whatever I face,I never give up.The rainbow always appears(主语是单数)after the rain.

joozone.com
“英语作文点评:I want to try”一文包含以下关键字,请点击获取相关文章
------分隔线----------------------------
今日最新更新英语作文
------分隔线----------------------------
栏目推荐