Another strength in this essay is the way it introduces an idea and then builds on that idea as the argument unfolds.
For instance, in a discussion of the existentialists in the second paragraph, the writer expands on an earlier point about "thinkers" in general: the existentialists may have "exploited their uncommon education and intellect," but the "basis for their movement was ordinary human behavior and existence."
It is logical connections such as these that make for a coherent and well-focused discussion.

The writer uses language fluently and controls sophisticated syntax throughout the essay: "I would argue that although it may be a benefit to study classics and be well schooled in diverse disciplines, these pursuits merely refine and hone an ability each and every person has, the ability to study human nature."

This is not a flawless paper: word choice, for example, is not always precise.
But the essay's cogent analysis, effective organization, and sophisticated sentence structure merit a solid score of 6.

SAMPLE-2 (score 5)

I can agree with the statement above that, "The best ideas arise from a passionate interest in commonplace things. "
The statement
is an accurate description of how many people form great ideas from ordinary things in life. Sports are all great ideas that are made from commonplace things.
What makes sports some of the best ideas is not what they began as but what they evolved into.

All athletic compe

titions began from commonplace things being
brought together for the purpose of entertainment, excercise, and social interaction.
Many of the sports people enjoy today are the results of someone's idea creating a new dimension of our lifestyle out of an ordinary object.
Baseball, basketball, and track especially show that the idea of creating something wonderful out of ordinary objects is true.

Who would have thought that a stick and a ball would spawn into a national pastime, a generational tie between father and son, , a national bond between all races, andjoozone.com