Hello , everybody ! My name is Yang Mingchang. I’m 14 years old. I come from Nanhai , Foshan .I like playing basketball very much. I play basketball with my friends after school every day. My favorite subjects is English and maths. I have a happy family. My father is a manager and he works in a factory. My mother is a doctor She works in a hospital in Foshan city . They work hard. I love them very much. I have no brothers and sisters . Sometimes I am not happy , I feel alone . Can you make a friend with me ?
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评 语：I play basketball with my friends 最好改为：I often play basketball with my friends .My favorite subjects is English and maths. 改为：My favorite subjects are English and maths.主语是复数，谓语动词要与主语保持一致。I feel alone . 改为：I feel lonely 。 lonely既可以作定语，也可以作表语。 作表语是“寂寞、孤立”的意思，一般指人孤独寂寞；作定语指地方荒无人烟，有浓厚的感情色彩。文笔不错！继续努力！