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2008高考英语满分作文名师点评及解析(4)

时间:2010-07-19来源:英语作文栏目:高考英语作文作者:网友供稿 英语作文收藏:收藏本文
2008 高考 英语满分作文名师点评及解析#e# 【湖北卷】 【试题回放】假设你是卜曼宜,你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机,因有质量问题,要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件。 要点:1. 问题:手
2008高考英语满分作文名师点评及解析#e#

  【湖北卷】

  【试题回放】假设你是卜曼宜,你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机,因有质量问题,要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件。

  要点:1. 问题:手机不响铃,不能发短信;该产品已售完,无法更换;型号新,无配件,无法维修。 2. 要求:公司应尽快予以更换。

  注意:1. 词数为100左右;

  2. 参考词汇:配件—— spare part;

  3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计入你所写词数);

  4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。

  Dear Sir,

  I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

  Thank you for your consideration.

  Sincerely yours,

  Bu Manyi

  【名师点评】

  本文内容要点齐全,语言丰富,结构合理,如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况,中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委,最后明确提出自己的要求,明白流畅,将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚,较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调,结合主动语态与被动语态,并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词,使文章结构完整严密。固定短语,如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用,使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。

  参考作文地带英汉互译:

  好词1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的3. consideration n.体谅

  好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

  令我失望的是,他说因为在中国是新款手机,所以没有配件来修理。

  评析:复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。

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