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2004-2009高考英语满分作文及名师评析(3)

时间:2010-08-27来源:作文地带整理栏目:高考英语作文作者:作文地带 英语作文收藏:收藏本文
By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance. Yours truly, Li Hua 【作文地带点评】 本文写作的内容要点如下: 1.自我介绍;2.信息来源;3.祝贺生日;4

  By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.

  Yours truly,

  Li Hua

  【作文地带点评】本文写作的内容要点如下:

  1.自我介绍;2.信息来源;3.祝贺生日;4.感谢照顾;5.索取照片;6.合适的结尾。

  这封信格式正确,行文规范,描述有条不紊,称呼、正文中的开头及结尾、结束语均表达到位。文章行文活泼,感情真挚,语言表述准确,洋溢着作者因大熊猫得到精心照顾而对美方人员的感激之情,以及希望自己愿望成真,得到照片的希冀之情。长短句运用合理,结合了简单句和复合句,流畅自然,不露痕迹,的确是一篇佳作。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1.delighted adj.欣喜的,快乐的 2.express v.表达 3.give birth to v.产生,生育

  好句I'd like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

  我祝福它生日快乐并且对你们的辛勤工作表达我的感激之情,正是你们的努力工作让苏琳和它的父母在美国过着幸福和健康的生活。

  评析:定语从句的使用。

  【北京卷】

  【试题回放】假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为校刊英语园地写一篇题为"Our Spring Outing" 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

  注意: 词数不少于60.

  提示词: 游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin

  Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

  The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

  We were tired but happy.

  【作文地带点评】

  本情景作文的内容要点如下:1.讨论;2.爬山;3.检拾别人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。内容要点可用不同方式表达。本文覆盖了所有内容要点,较好地完成了试题规定的任务。其中,写作主题突出,详略得当,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,而且有效的使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文机构紧凑。本文叙述清楚,描写细致,准确运用了很多富有表现力的词和句型,例如:"set off early","enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view", "were shocked to see litter here and there "等,将活动的情形很形象地描述了出来。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1 set off 出发 2. litter n.废弃物 3.respectively adv.分别地

  好句1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

  在爬山时,我们享受着温暖的阳光和美丽的风景。

  1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

  然而,当我们登上山顶,被眼前的一幕惊呆了:瓶子和香蕉皮这样的废弃物到处都是。joozone.com

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