●简单句型的转换

原句：Seattle is a garden city, with one of the most delightful climates in the world.

 

优化1：A garden city, with one of the most delightful climates in the world, is Seattle.

优化2：Seattle, a garden city, has one of the most delightful climates in the world.

 

原句：She knew English very well.

优化：She had a good command of English.

 

●复杂句型的转换

 

原句：They struggled forward. They were exhausted. Their steps were dragging. They had to push on.

优化：Exhausted, they struggled forward, their steps dragging, but they had to push on.

 

原句：Nothing here indicates where this information came from.

优化：There is no indication where this information came from

 

2009年6月六级写作真题参考范文

 

　　On the Importance of a Name

 

　　There is no denying the fact that it is a controversial topic whether names are important or not. Some hold the positive view. They claim that a good name, or a name that can be easily remembered, can bring one a lot more opportunities than others. Some Chinese may also believe that a name designed according to the traditional theory of five elements can bring good luck。

 

　　Others, however, hold the opposite view. They argue that a name is nothing but a code to distinguish one from another. A person “good” name may not be as successful as the name indicates. In the same way, a person who has a common or casually given name can also achieve tremendous success。

 

Personally, I believe that both sides have something right, so we should not go to extremes. On the one hand, we have to admit that a well designed name can help a person to some extent. On the other hand, we should not exaggerate the effect of a name on a person’s fate. Anyway, a person’s success mainly depends on his hard work and desirable personalities。(186 words)