Venuswang：
This is my compostion:
Dear Mr. Kofi Annan, Nov.27th. 2004
I am a junior who admire you immensely. As a Chinese college student from Beijing Material Institute, I have been concerning much about the current situation of world peace for a long time.
Much to my regret, it still exists much confliction, terror as well as warfare through out the world. When I heard out or read international news as to gunfight or brutality, the most impressive and unforgettable scenes coming into my mind are a great deal of innocent expressions in helpless children’s eyes. I can't imagine what is the true world would be like in their naive heart. As far as the children are concerned, they really want a happy and wonderful childhood without any wickedness. Therefore, I sincerely hope that everyone could live in a peaceful world rather than a horrible one in the foreseeable future.
We have only one world and anyone who eager for peace in this world advice that U.N. should make great efforts not only to pay more attention but also take effective matures to cope with this situation. Only in this way can we own a beautiful world which I am looking forward to all the time.
Yours Sincerely,
Venus
错误：
1.I have been concerning much about the current situation of world peace for a long time. / I have concerned about….
2.through out the world. / throughout the world.
3.When I heard out or read international news as to gunfight or brutality / When I heard out or read international news about gunfight or brutality
4.I can't imagine what is the true world would be like in their naive heart. / I can't imagine what the true world would be like in their naive heart.
5.anyone who eager for peace in this world advice that U.N. should make great efforts / anyone who is eager for …. advise…
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Nov.27st,2004
Dear Mr Annan,
I'm a university student in China. I am glad to write to you to show my opinion on the world peace.
Peace and Development are the two themes of the world nowadays.Hundreds of countries and millions of people are working hard on it. And now most of countries in the world are trying their best to keep the peace of the world ,including developed and developing countries. I think there are billions of people dreaming of living in a peaceful world. But as I know,violence is still exist.For example ,many terrorists are trying to destroy the world peace.Powerful countries as USA are inclined to be aggressive. And serious conflicts happen in African frequently. But I believe these incidents are minority,the majority of people are eager for peace.
So I hope the UN can take some measures to protect the world peace. I hope more laws and contracts about peace to be drawn up,less terror incidents to happen. I hope there are less wars in the world and people in every country enjoy their lives in peace.英语作文
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